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• on Orphaned by the War, a linguistic prodigy finds meaning as a Nazi Spy, when she falls for an Allied officer targeted by her team, she must risk it all to save the officer and her humanity.

  Hopefully, this version is closer. Although, I am not ?super happy with the "must risk it all" part. ?I stuck with it for brevities sake and because?i am unsure how much of the plot I should reveal. ?Let me know…

• on Nazi spy falls in love with her Allied Target and has 48 hours to rescue him before her sadistic team executes a plot that threatens them both.

  This is wonderful feedback. Thank you. So, your guess is pretty close to the story. ?Which?makes me feel okay because perhaps I may not have a horrible story just a sub-par log line :) Here is the quick summary of…

• on Nazi spy falls in love with her Allied Target and has 48 hours to rescue him before her sadistic team executes a plot that threatens them both.

  When she falls for an Allied soldier, an orphaned child prodigy turned Nazi Spy must rescue him before the sadistic group that trained her ?executes a plot that threatens them both. Seems long..

• on Nazi spy falls in love with her Allied Target and has 48 hours to rescue him before her sadistic team executes a plot that threatens them both.

  When [a major event happens], [the Hero], must [do the main action]. Major event - fall in love Hero - Nazi Spy Obstacle - Sadistic Team/ Clock Must ?- ?Rescue I agree I could?elaborate on the inciting incident to make…

• on A dangerous serial killer is the only survivor in a plane crash, when she was transported to a different prison, she is rescued by tibetans from remote high mountain village. After being treated from her injuries she faces a choice to leave the village or to merry 7 brothers of a family who took care of her, according to their matriarchal tradition.

  I am still a bit confused by this logline. What is the movie's genre? ? Polygamy?is usually pretty creepy but this feels more romantic and why does she HAVE to accept?the marriage? What is the conflict? You are closer, but…

• on In an American West ruled by dinosaurs, a young Teddy Roosevelt goes on an expedition into the Yellowstone to hunt one of the last of the great predators, confronting his and his nation’s destiny.

  I think it is a fun idea to take dinosaurs out of their traditional setting and mix it up with historical fiction. ?If the story is good, I might ignore the scientific flaws about oxygen ect?mentioned in other reviews. With…

• on Slated for Banishment on her sixteenth birthday, a young warrior must elude capture, rescue her best friend and hope her own twist doesn?t mutate further in the process. If they do manage to escape, Keira will have to face her nightmares, the creatures of a world twisted by the DNA Wars, and survive long enough to reach the City of Lights where she will be free from persecution.

  I think it is a little long too. Great ideas but they need streamlined.Maybe it should read something like:" A futuristic?warrior princess has 24 hours to escape the DNA wars before she mutates into something other than herself"I don't know…