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on When three bungling thieves manage to steal a gold bar, they think all their troubles are over. They were wrong.

Thanks for the helpful comments! The gold bar in question is a "Good Delivery" bar http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Good_Delivery They weigh about 28 pounds (400 ounces) and are worth upwards of $500,000US. The biggest problem is they are hard to fence, and thusly,…
on When he is rejected by the girl of his dreams, a teenager by the name of Tom Weldon must deal with the depression that follows, and the taunts of the asshole who beat her him to her.

Two things, I suppose there aren't any rules about vulgarity, but the use of the A-hole word is not necessary, and might turn off a potential investor. Second, the six words after A-hole don't make any sense. Maybe take out…