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on An archaeology student discovers three Angels in a tomb, who were violently made into humans by God. She reluctantly aids them in a search for a scared book to restore them to their natural form, so that they can exact their revenge and stop the “End of Times.”

It's an interesting concept, but you need to refine it. What is the heart of the story? A woman helping angels restore their divinity so they can save the world? Or is it a revenge tale? Whose story is being…
on At a popular theme park the new dancer/actor must try to survive and find the killer when employees begin to disappear and die before she becomes their next victim.

Interesting concept. Use an adjective to describe your lead. What kind of person will begin this journey? Also, if she is dealing with a killer, writing "disappear and die..." is redundant. What is the threat? She is fighting to stay…