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• on Down on his luck and fed up with his life in general, a black male is stopped by police in search of a suspect that fits his description.

  I agree with Stevey here. There are too many different directions this could go in. The situation you've described is something that happens every day in America and the whole world. We need you to tell us what makes this…

• on Mark and his team of bar trivia superstars are favored to win the regional invitationals, but when a team of geniuses enters the tournament, Mark must convince his ex-girlfriend to rejoin the team in order to take the big prize.

  You don't have to scrap the story. The one in this movie does not seem to be about convincing an ex to join the team. You should just be aware of that other movie when writing yours. Don't let the…

• on Mark and his team of bar trivia superstars are favored to win the regional invitationals, but when a team of geniuses enters the tournament, Mark must convince his ex-girlfriend to rejoin the team in order to take the big prize.

  I would refrain from using character names in your logline unless that name helps the audience understand the character. In this stage, it doesn't matter to us that he is named Mark. You're better off using descriptive words to tell…

• on As a family gathers to mourn the death of their grandmother, a mysterious interloper threatens both their lives and sanity.

  The problem with the logline is taht it is way too vague. You should tell us what the story is about. The interloper's intentions may be a mystery to the family, but we need to know who the main character…