chimaera

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on A young aspiring musician discovers that the English language reveals a conspiracy, which he utilizes to make himself a star. He learns the rich and famous are given strange powers for their so called accomplishments.

Is it a black comedy? I'd suggest the following, shorter: "Uncovering a conspiracy hidden within the English language, a young musician becomes a star and enters the rich and famous' secret battle for power over the fate of the world's…
on A group of subjects in a sleep experiment are stalked by multidimensional entities awakened to rip their spirits apart.

Enticing logline. Makes people (at least me) want to read it. Multidimensional entities?? I would expand on the 'awakened' part, possibly give a lit bit more details on what is going on there. Have you written the screenplay yet ?…