CaveDude21

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on To stop her ex-husband from stealing the Mona Lisa, a world-class cat burglar turned security expert must illegally install her own security in the Louvre.

Hey guys, I appreciate the feedback -- THANKS! Maybe I need to reword it, but I definitely don't want to lose the last part -- b/c that's the movie's Hook and the hero's main Goal. The Louvre doesn't believe her…
on The son of a scientist is called to the future to solve the world?s oxygen crisis and save the woman he loves.

I think an Oxygen Crisis is very credible. Look at Beijing, New Delhi, Mexico City, etc... 1,000s of residents routinely wear filter masks. But for greater effect I'd word it in the negative: Pollution (if, in fact, that's what you…
on Two men hunt the rogue crocodile that killed both their wives. One wants to save it, the other wants it dead!

Unless the crocodile actually escaped from somewhere (zoo, farm...), aren't they all technically "rogue?" I'd use that word/space to better describe how menacing the "villain" is. "Two men hunt for the blood-thirsty, 23' crocodile that..." Off the top of my…
on A selfish teenager has until sunrise to rescue his devoted little sister from the place where dreams REALLY come from, or else they'll be trapped there forever.

I agree, I like it -- and I'd like a bit more: Place and Villain "A selfish teenager has until sunrise to rescue his devoted little sister from _______, a place where dreams REALLY come from, or else _________ will…