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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
As he chronicles one tenacious man's fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity. Same thread for the story, different…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
When mankind destroys their planet (main event), alien observers are ordered to halt a 100,000-year experiment they have been running, collect viable specimens from the human survivors and terraform the planet (stakes), one troubled survivor (hero) must convince them spare…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Thanks, no feedback is bad and straightforward is good.
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
I like your thought process, I have been playing with the idea that they do in fact convince them to leave...after cleaning up the earth, or better yet they convince them to leave and let man figure out how to…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
For some reason can't reply to you recent post. The motivation of the aliens is: they are longing for beings that can join them as equals. Think of them as shepherds/farmers maybe - they won't "give" a race technology unless…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Experiment is coming to a halt because man has destroyed his world; they either have to terminate or reset humanity. Lots to play on there in the book - the man is only one of many potential to reseed earth…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Alright, I think I may have nailed what I am trying to convey in a short, concise sentence: An unwitting participant in an alien experiment must vanquish the ghosts of his past in order to save the woman he loves…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
There are two threads, one is the experiment which is covert, the other is the man with the troubled past (he killed his brother in a hunting accident). He becomes the focal point of the experiment as it winds to…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
I think what I posted was unclear; that was the old logline (I have fixed the post)...the new one was at the top. You make good points though which I am pondering. This might be better, but leaves out much…
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Being shot in the head is different for one young woman who lives in the moment, since instead of dying, she receives the responsibility of keeping heaven and hell from falling apart, or else an evil far worse than anyone can imagine will destroy everything and everyone.
I am still learning all the nuances of loglines myself, but I am sure this can be tightened. Wouldn't something like this say it also?: After dying, a simple woman must prevent all out war between heaven and hell or…
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An out-world war destines a bio-molecular energy, ineffectual in fusion with any previous life form to Planet Earth, where a benevolent and jubilant father-to-be unwittingly absorbs it and must engage in battle with the implacable beings pursuing the power source for galactic dominion.
I have read this a number of times and must say I am no closer to the idea. Richiev hit is spot on.
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
I modified you thoughts, yet as I slept on it and drove into work I realized it missed much of what the story is about. My protagonist is a survivor, yet has been alone since the bombs fell. He meets…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
I was so tempted to leave the post-apocalyptic part in, but the more I thought about it the more I saw your point. You don't have to give away all of the story in the logline, just as you said…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Wow, I would think that you read my book that this is based on with what you wrote there. I think you got the gist quite well. Let me mull that over a bit.
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
In a post-apocalyptic world >>Again post-apocalyptic? says it all (took your advice) an average college student leaves his bomb shelter >> Add more on the WHO and finds himself in a race against time >>Good. A ticking clock. (Obviously kept…
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In a future where criminals are punished with instant aging, when a young ex-convict -turned 70- learns about a place where his youth can be restored, he has a week to find it before the process becomes irreversible.
The interesting concept here is that you have an old man acting with the mannerisms, speech, etc of a young man...
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Ah ha; that breakdown helps a lot. Thanks =) I have updated...I think I am getting closer. I was unsure if your comment suggested changing the beginning or not. Due to the title, Against the Fall, I thought to use…
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Changed it, not sure if it answers all the questions?also not sure if I should edit the original, or add as a new post - edited the original.
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As he chronicles one tenacious man’s fight to survive after a nuclear holocaust decimates life on Earth, a dedicated and determined alien observer must decide whether to obey or defy orders to terminate humanity.
Thanks, I will work on how to incorporating your comments. This is my first attempt at a logline.
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When a delusional shut-in discovers that his favorite webcam model has been kidnapped, he must utilize his detective skills to locate her before she becomes another victim of a rampant madman.
I liked the detective skills part myself, it leads one to wonder if the shut-in might actually leave his house to do the investigation.
