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• on A psychologist must revisit his childhood fears in order to help a disturbed teen find the truth behind his encounters with a mysterious supernatural being known as "Slender Man."

  Thanks for the feedback I really appreciate it! I have a lot of solid input to take back with me to the drawing board now.

• on A hotshot reality TV cameraman tries to outsmart a stalker who records him in his home and airs the footage on television.

  Well i clearly hit reply to sharkeatingman's comment for the comment above, but I'm not sure if it registered that. Oh well.

• on A hotshot reality TV cameraman tries to outsmart a stalker who records him in his home and airs the footage on television.

  Thank you for your comment! Even though there is a steady elevation in my actual story, the stakes are definitely missing from this logline, so thanks. Back to the drawing board!

• on A hotshot reality TV cameraman tries to outsmart a stalker who records him in his home and airs the footage on television.

  I've been trying to think of a different way to describe this guy. Hotshot never felt right to me, so thanks for affirming that. I said hotshot to convey some aspects of him (arrogance, competence in his field, willing to…

• on Title: Almiiitey, Maine Logline: A big city killer hides his crimes in the snow-covered secrets of Almiiitey, Maine's smallest small town.

  I like the irony of the big city killer using the small town, but this seems like more of a detail of the movie rather than a plot. What is the conflict? Who is the antagonist?

• on Two recently unemployed nerds get more than they ask for when they fake a UFO encounter to generate publicity for their start-up business.

  I felt like this detail was missing as well. But I was really struggling to find a way to put that in without overloading it with information. I'll keep thinking about it, because I definitely think you're right here. Thanks!

• on Two recently unemployed nerds get more than they ask for when they fake a UFO encounter to generate publicity for their start-up business.

  Comedy/Sci-Fi

• on When he is rejected by the girl of his dreams, a teenager by the name of Tom Weldon must deal with the depression that follows, and the taunts of the asshole who beat her him to her.

  I think this sounds a little passive. As an audience member, I'm not sure what type of action Tom is going to take to try to overcome this. You do say "must deal with," but I think it could benefit…

• on Jesus is alive…but the Church wants him dead

  this is great!