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on In a future where babies are no longer born, a black market dealer of artificial wombs must find his baby daughter when competitors take the womb and sell it to the highest bidder. (For #meetup)

wow, i want to watch this film. while i agree that the setting isn't necessary, what the first line does for me is give me genre and give me stakes. without "babies are no longer born" then the goal of…
on When a young bride gets cold feet, her grandmother who has multiple ex-husbands is the only one who can save the day

thank you both for your feedback and questions, they are very helpful. i'll process and revise. i hope to post a revised logline soon. happy holidays!
on When a young bride gets cold feet, her grandmother who has multiple ex-husbands is the only one who can save the day

Thanks for your comment, Richiev. I struggled a little bit with that question because the bride seemed to be the character that goes through the most change at the end of the story. The Grandmother is definitely the lead character.…
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sounds interesting. i think you should look at the last part "incurs the wrath..." not sure what it is but i found myself wondering if she' incurs this wrath simply by finding it? or does she use the recipe? or…