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• on While undercover, an earnest detective falls in love with a criminal. But when he aides her during a bust, the pair fight to escape the country together.

  After falling for a criminal, an unfulfilled undercover officer during a drug bust betrays his badge, switches sides, and fights to flee the country with her. Just a thot...

• on After a reformed ex-gang member's sister is raped and left for dead, he struggles to walk the straight and narrow as his stepmother blames him.

  Thanks Timmy and Kriss. Appreciate your comments. His hunt for the truth is to find them, expose them and make them pay... Remember the ending of Black Rain? Carlito's way? Not that my script is similar to those but its…

• on After a reformed ex-gang member's sister is raped and left for dead, he struggles to walk the straight and narrow as his stepmother blames him.

  Returning from prison, a reformed ex-gang leader's sister is raped and left for dead. With his stepmom blaming him, he struggles with reversion and hunts the culprits.

• on A fast-talking drifter recruits a supernatural team to help him steal Pandora?s Box from Lucifer, in order to be reinstated as heaven?s Angel of Darkness.

  The supernatural team... Are they all fallen angels? Do they wanna be reinstated? An ambitious fallen angel recruits other fallen angels to help steal whats most precious to Lucifer in order to bargain their return.... Just a thot...

• on When an arrogant, big-shot Hollywood Producer fails at murdering a big-shot actor, he must hunt down the star before the news gets out and ruins his career.

  Hmm.... Arrogant? Shady, Double dealing or Scheming Hollywood producer will give one a better picture of the producer and would give an understanding why his family was kidnapped

• on Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy struggles to attain peace as he unwittingly rekindles an age long war.

  After unwittingly rekindling an ancient war, a youngboys survival depends on him stopping the war at all cost even if it means coming up against his ancestors wishes.

• on Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy struggles to attain peace as he unwittingly rekindles an age long war.

  JanCabal Things to note. Maybe this will shed more light into helping me get a great logline.... There is an older world living in parallel with this world as we know it in which there "is" a bitter war The…

• on Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy struggles to attain peace as he unwittingly rekindles an age long war.

  Andrew....... YES you are correct. (y) Spot on.

• on Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy struggles to attain peace as he unwittingly rekindles an age long war.

  Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy unwittingly rekindles an age long war and struggles to end the war.

• on Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy struggles to attain peace as he unwittingly rekindles an age long war.

  Wanting to right his ancestors wrongdoings during the slave-trade era, a youngboy struggles to attain peace between worlds as he unwittingly rekindles an age long war.

• on A reckless government agent learns his long lost brother is a test subject of a government experiment, leading him to team with terrorists to mount a rescue.

  I would think something along the lines of "When a well decorated federal agent learns his long lost brother is a test subject of a government experiment his only hope is to team with terrorists to mount a rescue." provides…

• on After an accident causes a successful CEO to lose both legs, he is forced to re-evaluate his life and identity

  Cameron, what is there to re-evaluate if he is successful as you have described him? Why not use a different qualifier like "nasty" or "callous" or "mean instead of Successful ( or in addition to it eg: a mean and…

• on When 13 year old Bob decide to handover certain family artifacts and heirlooms of over 300 years to the British National Museum, an ancient war resumes and to stop the war, Bob has to go into the past to right the wrongs made by his ancestors.

  Thanks nicholasandrewhalls... Is it just me or it's easier to write a script than write a logline? :) I don't want to get sucked into a situation whereby progress is dependent on a logline. "A young boys quest to close…

• on When 13 year old Bob decide to handover certain family artifacts and heirlooms of over 300 years to the British National Museum, an ancient war resumes and to stop the war, Bob has to go into the past to right the wrongs made by his ancestors.

  Thanks mmckean... the revision was just an attempt to reduce the length of the Logline. Bob is a descendant of a man who was a major player during the trans-atlantic slave trade. The artifacts were some personal belongings of some…

• on An investigative journalist discovers the strangest story of his career after he stumbles on a mysterious mansion in the woods, guarded by the military.

  How about this? A journalist low on his luck makes a discovery that that could save his career but ultimately end his life. With little time available to him, he has to decide which is worth saving.

• on When 13 year old Bob decide to handover certain family artifacts and heirlooms of over 300 years to the British National Museum, an ancient war resumes and to stop the war, Bob has to go into the past to right the wrongs made by his ancestors.

  When Bob hands over family treasures? to the Museum, an ancient war resumes. To stop the war, Bob has to right wrongs of his ancestors.