Bbass74

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• on It’s 2151 and a bio scientist finds herself in the middle of the largest coverup in history. She begins a race against time to expose her former CEO?s deceit or else mankind changes forever.

  To follow up on my reply I realized that the land deal is not the inciting incident so I tried again on the logline with this: It?s 2151 and when a timid bio scientist finds her co worker dead, she…

• on When a simple farmer?s daughter is forced to choose the love of a German prisoner or her country?s patriotism she confronts her neighbors’ prejudices in an effort to heal a divided American town.

  "you could have the German POW kill one of her kin who gets winds of the budding affair" How did you get a hold of my script??? Haha, yes, there is an element of that but I didn't even connect…

• on When a simple farmer?s daughter is forced to choose the love of a German prisoner or her country?s patriotism she confronts her neighbors’ prejudices in an effort to heal a divided American town.

  Thanks for the feedback. To answer some questions: Her ultimate goal is to be able to be with the German prisoner in which she has ?fallen in love. However, it cannot happen openly in the small southern Alabama town unless…

• on A grieving 12 year old boy must navigate between his physical and fantasy worlds, battling fears and doubts to uncover the origins of a mysterious dagger. This journey will test the truths of who he is and who he is to become.

  Thanks DPG! This gives me quite a bit to chew on. Gonna give it another go and write some more variations and share when I have them ready. Thanks so much for the time to respond!

• on A grieving 12 year old boy must navigate between his physical and fantasy worlds, battling fears and doubts to uncover the origins of a mysterious dagger. This journey will test the truths of who he is and who he is to become.

  So you're saying the emphasis shouldn't be on reclaiming what he had lost but what he will learn throughout the journey and that should be the goal stated in the logline, am I hearing you correctly? I appreciate this process…

• on A grieving 12 year old boy must navigate between his physical and fantasy worlds, battling fears and doubts to uncover the origins of a mysterious dagger. This journey will test the truths of who he is and who he is to become.

  Thanks DPG, some great insight. ?Actually, as 12 year old, a boy is plenty old enough to have already been exploring heroic tendencies. By 9 years old boys can start showing signs of claiming and through play learning the art…

• on A grieving 12 year old boy must navigate between his physical and fantasy worlds, battling fears and doubts to uncover the origins of a mysterious dagger. This journey will test the truths of who he is and who he is to become.

  Based on the pilot of the series, how about this: "A grieving 12 year old boy must recover a lost dagger that has opened up a fantasy world in which he must journey through in the hopes of reclaiming his…

• on A grieving 12 year old boy must navigate between his physical and fantasy worlds, battling fears and doubts to uncover the origins of a mysterious dagger. This journey will test the truths of who he is and who he is to become.

  Taken from DPG?s suggestion of basing this off the pilot alone and not the series as a whole, does change things. In the pilot, the boy finds the dagger and begins to have fantasies about where the dagger came from,…

• on A grieving 12 year old boy must navigate between his physical and fantasy worlds, battling fears and doubts to uncover the origins of a mysterious dagger. This journey will test the truths of who he is and who he is to become.

  This is a drama/fantasy scripted series if that helps.