JustAnIdea

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A frazzled man's secret lives are set to collide when he discovers his wife has invited everyone he knows to his surprise 40th birthday.

November 1, 2012
After falling for the woman who defrauded his company, a now bankrupt playboy hatches the perfect plan to win her heart: he'll bust her out of prison.

November 1, 2012
Five years after begging his friends to never let him marry again, a young man finds himself with a wonderful new fiancee and one friend with an oath they intend to keep.

September 12, 2012
At his wife's annual work retreat, a stay-at-home Dad must battle the other wives and husbands who all want his wife's job for their own partners.

September 12, 2012

on As a cursed detective struggles to contain the wolf within, he suspects he is being framed for murder. In order to uncover the true killer, he must accept the wolf? or be lost to the beast forever.

Sounds interesting. Though there's a lot of vague stuff here. "cursed detective" - specific "struggling to contain the wolf within" - vague "suspects he is being framed" - vague "framed for murder" - specific "uncover the true killer" - specific…
on On a dare a naive orphan tries to get aboard a legendary space ship, and back to the orphanage before dinner with a "souvenir" from the ship or the two bullies who made the dare will smash his model space ship.

Why did I think that the 'model ship' would actually (by some freak time/space warp thingy) actually be the REAL SHIP that the boy is on board? I'm not sure if a story about a couple of kids threatening to…
on An egotistical vigilante who kills the countries worst child-killers becomes a media-hyped national hero but has to make a choice between 'fame' and his family…

I'm not sure about the "..." If it's important to the logline (and it seems like it was leading to the actual conflict) then my guess is it should be in the logline.
on When a coke-dealing security guard at a grocery store finds himself in the midst of a deadly shooting, he discovers that he isn?t the only one leading a double life.

Seems like this is still only hinting at what the story will be about. I'm thinking it be a fight for survival type of thing - 'Contained Action' maybe? In which case maybe it needs to be in the logline...Unless…