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Logliner · 149 points

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A meek middle-aged clerk has to escape a violent interrogation by a determined CIA agent who identifies him as the nation’s number one terrorist menace.

December 14, 2020
A British Major and aristocrat must team up with a vulgar guerilla leader in order to blow up a bridge in Nazi occupied Greece. Based on a true story.

November 7, 2017
A workaholic businesswoman changes lifestyle after her husband dies but when she suspects he faked his death she has to find him before her company does.

November 2, 2017

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on A meek middle-aged clerk has to escape a violent interrogation by a determined CIA agent who identifies him as the nation’s number one terrorist menace.

That is indeed a correct logline for The Guilty, but it is not representative of the movie and its twists. So my not-so-rhetorical question is how can one pull off the promise of a twist without giving away the twist?
on A meek middle-aged clerk has to escape a violent interrogation by a determined CIA agent who identifies him as the nation’s number one terrorist menace.

OK, cool thanks. Very helpful insights. We envision it as 12 Angry Men meets Saw, so it is a contained thriller-crime, with more twists than what you guys mentioned or thought of. So there are internal and external arcs for…
on When a mistress learns her lover has died and his death erroneously ruled a suicide, she must untangle the true cause of his death.

It is interesting and has some of the main ingredients, namely Character, Inciting incident, Action, Goal, which are all really important. I feel it lacks Stakes, which are implied, but we need more: what will happen if she does not…
on When an exiled prince unexpectedly becomes ruler in a foreign kingdom, he must make dangerous alliances if he is to survive the vampire Emperor who murdered his parents.

There is potential here but yes, you have to confine it some more. What are the dangerous alliences? Are they with vampires? We need to know that! To me the fact that he is away in a foreign kingdom is…
on A bitter old man plays an advanced virtual reality game and conquers his fear of technology.

Maybe your bitter old man is an interesting character but since you have such a noun the logline would benefit from some irony. If he is bitter old man and the virtual reality game is for 11-year-old girls and full…