ASU Maduro

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Forced into a rural witness protection location, a five star city chef meets someone who teaches how to cook, using simple, humble, ingredients, and love.

February 14, 2014
A filthy rich ad man bets a corporate rival that he can live on the streets of N.Y. without the comforts of home or money for a month, which proves to be tougher than he thought.

February 12, 2014
After being sold to the intergalactic highest bidder, humanity has one year to vacate planet Earth. Tom, short on cash and influence, must find a way to move his family before ?Forceful Evictions? begin.

February 12, 2014
A mild mannered office worker is on the run from the government that need his DNA to cure a tyrannical president and the rebel group that want him dead.

January 26, 2013

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on It's February 1930, just months after Black Tuesday. In light of their financial woes, a small-town mortician and his arrogant wife start murdering the rich to keep their beloved funeral home afloat.

Great story idea. I would change a few things: 1) Relocate setting to big city (more $$, more bodies) 2) Change date to end of The Great Depression (banking getting better = fewer bodies) 3) Make the wife the antagonist,…
on When the best players of a intergalactic war computer game are hunted down by an alien bounty hunter, the survivors must band together to fight both on earth and in the game to win a very real space war. Tag Line: a war simulation so good, it's real…

Too similar to 'The Last Starfighter."
on After being sold to the intergalactic highest bidder, humanity has one year to vacate planet Earth. Tom, short on cash and influence, must find a way to move his family before ?Forceful Evictions? begin.

Great ideas. Let's get started with an outline, then first draft.
on Forced into a rural witness protection location, a five star city chef meets someone who teaches how to cook, using simple, humble, ingredients, and love.

After entering witness protection, his cover is blown due to his popularity as a country cook. Must fight after the mob finds him out. Michael Corleone goes to Italy, but I'm telling the chef's perspective, after witnessing the murder.
on Forced into a rural witness protection location, a five star city chef meets someone who teaches how to cook, using simple, humble, ingredients, and love.

While in a rural location under witness protection from the mob, a five star chef is introduced to cooking with simple, humble ingredients, and love. Only then, is he willing to stand up for what is right. *After Michael Corleone…
on After being sold to the intergalactic highest bidder, humanity has one year to vacate planet Earth. Tom, short on cash and influence, must find a way to move his family before ?Forceful Evictions? begin.

Earth is not destroyed. Sold = You! Get the f@ck out. Intergalactic Stock market...Ebay...Crap game...Earth is no longer a place humans are aloud to live. "must find a way..." Is intentionally vague (presidential daughter kidnapping is a possibility. Thanks.) Staying…
on After being sold to the intergalactic highest bidder, humanity has one year to vacate planet Earth. Tom, short on cash and influence, must find a way to move his family before ?Forceful Evictions? begin.

Hunted and killed with extreme prejudice. Not sure what other 'ticking time bomb' to add as a motivator.
on After being sold to the intergalactic highest bidder, humanity has one year to vacate planet Earth. Tom, short on cash and influence, must find a way to move his family before ?Forceful Evictions? begin.

I want it to parallel The Grapes of Wrath, but set in the distant future. Humanity is in the first generation of interstellar space travel, but limited to the very wealthy, connected, and risky. Space travel is available to everyone,…
on A reformed thief decides to help his reclusive brother, court his dream girl, when he discovers she?s the daughter of a wealthy investment banker.

You should specify 1) what type of thief the brother is 2) which brother is after the dream girl 3) where is the hurdle to overcome.
on Johnny falls in love with a girl at his school but she?s dating a rich, spoiled and hot guy. Johnny becomes depressed but his adopted older brother is coming back from a boarding school and he broke up with his girlfriend soon and is seeking out ways to get a new one.

It?s a little wordy and muddled as to who the protagonist is and what they want to accomplish.
on A mild mannered office worker is on the run from the government that need his DNA to cure a tyrannical president and the rebel group that want him dead.

His DNA will cure the ailing the president on a path to dictatorship. The rebel group knows this and wants to prevent it from happening.
on A strikingly beautiful girl of nineteen's powers as a spiritual healer make her the community sweetheart, but she struggles to maintain her sanity as her father forces her into the family business – of mass murder.

Ooooohh?the dichotomy of healing and destruction. This can be very tasty. Two suggestions: 1) Leave out ?beautiful?, because anyone they cast will be that. 2) and tone down the ?mass murder? to ?contract? killer. Very few mass murderers? kids follow…
on A seemingly ideal Bible Belt family man, is shaken to the core by a secret romance with a handsome young country and western singer that brings him his first real happiness, and the potential to destroy his life and the lives of everyone around him.

I like the mix of the man?s morality flaws and country and western theme. Is the CW star male or female? Does the Bible man still have happiness after the secret is out? A lot of potential and can move…