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on When a group of vigilante paedophile hunters attempt to capture their latest target, they discover the limitations of their unprofessional crusade.

This sounds great. However consider that it's already understood that they're 'unprofessional' by virtue of them being vigilantes. Maybe they 'find themselves trapped in a world of..' or 'meet their match in the criminal underworld..' or something like that.
on (6th revision) After performing a flowed mummification, a child must atone for shirking human souls from the Earth Spirit; after much suffering, he rises as Anubis, the judge of the dead.

I think you mean 'flawed', but you can also say 'botched' or 'bungled' or even 'unsuccessful'. Also consider making a new sentence for 'After much suffering..'
on Two goofballs Navy seals go back in time to Valley Forge and try and help out George Washington.

What do they help GW do!?