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on A couple stuggles to make sense of their troubled relationship as the end of the world draws closer

too general, probably you should avoid using vague phrase: to make sense? (more specific, how?), trouble relationship (what? why 'trouble'?), the end of the world draws closer (you can also be more specific here, how? what stake? the event is…
on A young girl travels through the woods to find a cure for her fathers illness during the end of the world and the end of humanity

I agree with asamman. Great idea that the logline failed to show. here It just looks like you take part of your story as your logline, You suppose to sum up your story so we can be interested in the…