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• on When a snake attack threatens his species with extinction, a sheltered kangaroo rat must embark on a perilous journey to unite his colony with another, 250 kilometers away.

  To be honest I hadn't even thought of that. Perhaps... Veagle was the name I gave them too! His backstory: He was captured by humans and kept illegally as a pet- had his wings clipped and can no longer fly.…

• on When a snake attack threatens his species with extinction, a sheltered kangaroo rat must embark on a perilous journey to unite his colony with another, 250 kilometers away.

  My thinking for the hero's mission- he has to persuade a group of golden eagles to fly the remaining colony south on their upcoming migration (the eagles would much rather eat them all)

• on When a snake attack threatens his species with extinction, a sheltered kangaroo rat must embark on a perilous journey to unite his colony with another, 250 kilometers away.

  both great pieces of feedback Maybe there's an elder kangaroo rat in the colony who somehow came from the distant colony, but the others dismiss him as mad and say its impossible, but the hero believes him. I was thinking…

• on With the help of his undead lost love, a reluctant store manager must return to the island where she was slain to prevent the escape of a primitive evil before the anniversary of her death.

  Imaginative! What significance does the 'anniversary of her death' have in relation to the escaping of the evil? What is it about the main character that makes him the only man for the job? Does the undead lover enlist his…

• on A smart but directionless food delivery boy is mistakenly given the kiss of death from a psychotic gangster and must outwit the mob in order to survive and get his life back on track

  Thanks for your advice Craig. I've done a rewrite that includes a MPR: When a smart but directionless pizza boy is mistakenly given the kiss of death by a psychotic crime boss, he must outrun the mob to survive, but…

• on After killing its progeny as part of an initiation hunting family ritual, a man and his teenage son must protect themselves from a horrid beast that hunts in the dark and feeds upon human skin.

  With regards to the beast hunting only at night- are the father and son stuck somewhere they can't easily get away from, or can the night time have more of a significance? I'm thinking of Quiet Place, Birdbox and It…

• on After a childhood of abuse, a young woman decides to write a memoir to help her heal.

  In order to raise stakes and obstacles, I'll tell you where my mind went straight away with this one. Perhaps the main character is older, and is starting to get dementia. She has carried this burden with her all her…

• on An overnight caregiver and a bored stiff succubus form an unlikely alliance to launch a dark web speed dating site.

  I would like to see some description of the two characters that give us an indication as to why they have both decided to go on this adventure together. Other questions I have are:What are their intentions for setting up…

• on After receiving a private invite to compete,? five amateur cooks find themselves trapped by elite cannibals and must cook to win in order to survive.

  As dpg asked, what are the details involved with not surviving? Perhaps its a competition with stages, and the loser becomes the main ingredient for the next dish, only the participants don't realize it at first. To me this idea…

• on When a down-on-his luck food delivery driver inadvertently delivers the kiss of death to a troubled drug lord, he must use his street knowledge to navigate himself out of the criminal underworld in order to survive.

  When a down-on-his luck delivery boy is inadvertently given the kiss of death when delivering pizza to a mafia boss, he must use his street knowledge in order to survive and find the true target of the hit.

• on After abandoning his family, a reclusive fugitive must come out of hiding in order to save his son, who has been kidnapped by his vengeful ex-partner in crime.

  After his vengeful ex-partner in crime recruits his son for a dangerous heist, a reclusive fugitive must come out of hiding and take his place in order to save him.

• on After abandoning his family, a reclusive fugitive must come out of hiding in order to save his son, who has been kidnapped by his vengeful ex-partner in crime.

  After his vengeful ex-partner in crime recruits his son for a dangerous heist, a reclusive fugitive must come out of hiding to save him.

• on When introverted twins experiences racially motivated harassment from their white classmates and one is sexually assaulted by their school counselor, the twins seeks revenge by hunting everyone who mistreated them.

  Agree with points made above- the first thing that came to my mind was how to get one MC with twins- perhaps they could be twins but of different race (this can happen!)- adds a twist to the racial drama…

• on An assassin with a split personality is hired to protect a client who, unknowingly, his other personality has been hired to kill.

  An instantly interesting logline with a lot of potential! I'm interested to know more about the client- what are his/her reasons for being the target of the hit and why does he/she choose the protagonist to help protect them. Agree…

• on A guy asks 100 people “Which comedian is going to land on his feet and get his end away with an absolute cracker?”? You said, “Les Dennis,” our survey said, “Ding, top answer!” Jammy bastard.

  Extras!

• on After he finds out the mysterious woman he spent the night with is his fiancee’s stepmother, a troubled playboy must navigate a weekend retreat filled with sexual tension and jealousy.

  What genre are you going for here? I know it's in the romance category but there is definitely potential for this to fit in a number of genres!