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on While shooting their first music video, a local metal band on the rise quickly realizes that the urban legend surrounding their filming location is true: When people enter, they don?t exit.

Good points. Also it would be a good idea to just say what's that location: woods? old factory? amusement park? spaceship? church? That way we can imagine the film better.
on A troubled playboy, confronting the emptiness of his life, spends the weekend with his fiancee’s family, and falls for her stepmother – a woman afraid of love.

Sounds good! We could use some location about where that family lives or where do they meet, so we can get a quick idea of what kind of famiy that is or what scenery and locations the film would display.…