Alison

89 points

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4 loglines
6 reviews

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A garden designer must put aside cultural differences in order to win a gardening competition.

November 4, 2024
A suburban family must deal with raising children, neurotic relatives and the arrival of their Pacific Island adopted daughter’s biological uncle who believes culture is more important than family.

July 23, 2021
A driven mum must rise above her own insecurities to prove her inter-racially adopted daughter loves her.

December 16, 2020
An old and worthless dog must find a forever home before it’s too late.

March 22, 2020

Recent reviews

on An aspiring teen screenwriter on the autism spectrum, battling discouragement from peers and writer’s block, is determined to write a blockbuster movie and submit it to a Hollywood screenwriting contest after she meets one of her original characters based on a dream she had one night — an intelligent robot cat.

I like the idea very much and find it could have the potential to be very amusing but agree with Mike. There needs to be more about what stops her apart from discouragement. Does she go on a journey with…
on A driven mum must rise above her own insecurities to prove her inter-racially adopted daughter loves her.

So not to lose her daughter.
on A driven mum must rise above her own insecurities to prove her inter-racially adopted daughter loves her.

Thank you Mike for your really insightful review. With the way you perceived it, I can see how it doesn’t tell my story at all. I’m seriously struggling with the hero’s desire. I was going along the desire line of…
on EDITED: In Victorian London a ruthless spy battles a fanatic telepath to thwart his plot to kill the Queen and plunge the world into war.

It sounds interesting. This might be tighter. In Victorian London an American spy attempts to thwart the plot of a telepathic madman before he assassinates the Queen. Not sure if American serves any purpose. Would rather see an adjective to…
on ?An emerging artist comes to town to become an art star, but it won’t be easy for him, there he falls in love with a promising young lawyer. A car accident leaves the couple in a coma, only one can live thanks to the heart of the other, and thus be able to fulfill their dreams. ?

It sounds interesting but I'm not clear why the one with the good heart would give it up. Some options to consider: What is the inciting incident? Perhaps it can start from when the heart transplant happens Maybe have a…
on A married woman accidentally drinks a love potion and falls in love with a shy prince. Her open-hearted husband is excited for her, but the King isn’t.

Not quite sure why her husband would be OK with that. Not sure what the stakes are either. What's her journey?