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When a lumber baron?s greed-driven experiments in tree growth acceleration unintentionally create colossal moose, he summons John Bear, biologist, to destroy the creatures before their house-crushing size and insatiable hunger cause massive devastation.
Sorry, that should've read 'I want to see some irony, for example in John Bear's flaw'. I wish Logline.it had an Edit Post button.
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When a lumber baron?s greed-driven experiments in tree growth acceleration unintentionally create colossal moose, he summons John Bear, biologist, to destroy the creatures before their house-crushing size and insatiable hunger cause massive devastation.
I agree - I got lost in all the qualifiers trying to figure out what was going on. I don't think you need to tell us that the experiments are specifically about growth acceleration, for example. And you've referred to…
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When a Fire-Demon from his parents past kidnaps his fianc?, a timid hydrologist must locate a mythical artefact and uncover its power before the Devil kills his lover and unborn child.
Structurally, you've got a lot of interesting pieces here with high stakes and irony. I'd lead with the main character and his flaw, then his problem, then what he's going to do about it. In terms of story, I feel…
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While out on a date – a young; confident; and carefree girl comes across the most addictive of aromas.
She follows it like a drug only to be lead to a dead body.
Now her morals are at war with her new found obsession – She's addicted to the smell of death.
Love how dark it is. I'm hooked - but I want to know more about what her strange new obsession will drive her to do. Will she start roaming the dangerous parts of the city at night, hunting for corpses?…
