95Eric

Penpusher · 76 points

224 points to Logliner

on After witnessing a god rape her sister, a naive nymph seeks revenge, risking her life in the process.

Great start! But it feels a little vague. What kind of god? Does the nymph have any faults that must be overcome. How is she going to risk her life?
on When a bio-terrorist’s engineered plague infects a superhero, he breaks out of prison to create a cure for the woman he loves.

Great start! But because it's a superhero ?story, it could be useful to hint at what makes the superhero "super". Is it an alien with special powers? A rich playboy that moonlights as a vigilante? That little bit of information…