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Abandoned by his wife and depressed, a British middle aged man relocates to Bangkok; after finding work as a teacher, his depression quickly turns into hilarity.
>>>his depression quickly turns into hilarity.Dramatic problem solved! End of story, end of series!There needs to be something about starting over in ?Bangkok that??is a continual font of weekly woe for the protagonist. ?As every good comic knows, comedy comes from pain and conflict. ComedyRead more
>>>his depression quickly turns into hilarity.
Dramatic problem solved! End of story, end of series!
There needs to be something about starting over in ?Bangkok that??is a continual font of weekly woe for the protagonist. ?As every good comic knows, comedy comes from pain and conflict. Comedy is just tragedy with a punch line. ?The generic comedy scenario that would seem appropriate is the fish-out-of-water.
Within that scenario the protagonist needs to be acting out a?defining ?flaw, a weakness a blind spot ?that keeps getting him in trouble (and generating laughs) episode after episode. ?What is his defining character flaw? ?Is he a compulsive womanizer (that’s why his wife dumped him?), an obsessive-compulsive neurotic, a lovable loser?
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The premise has a lot of potential for comedy. ?But in order to mine the comedy from the situation, there needs ?to be a big dramatic problem the protagonist has to wrestle with. What is it? It seems like she's ?wandered into the solution to her writing woes, ?a great source of raw material for a boRead more
The premise has a lot of potential for comedy. ?But in order to mine the comedy from the situation, there needs ?to be a big dramatic problem the protagonist has to wrestle with. What is it?
It seems like she’s ?wandered into the solution to her writing woes, ?a great source of raw material for a book. ?What’s the gotcha, the complication that threatens her project?
See lessAfter his twin brother is murdered while moonlighting as a vigilante, an introverted medical student dons his brother’s mask to hunt down his killers.
I'm a ?little concerned about the occupation: vigilante. ?To justify it it as a dramatic choice I can sympathize with, I have to imagine that the protagonist lives in a?lawless society or repressive regime where justice by due process isn't possible. ?The logline might benefit from some clarificatioRead more
I’m a ?little concerned about the occupation: vigilante. ?To justify it it as a dramatic choice I can sympathize with, I have to imagine that the protagonist lives in a?lawless society or repressive regime where justice by due process isn’t possible. ?The logline might benefit from some clarification that justifies vigilante justice.
As a card carrying introvert (and proud), I am also concerned with the use of the word “introverted”. ?Introversion is not a synonym for timid, or cowardly, or cautious or risk-aversive. ? A person can be introverted — and not be afraid to take risks, put himself in danger.
Finally, it would be better for the ?protagonist’s defining characteristic/flaw to be stated in contrast to that of his brother. ?So if the protagonist is fearful than his brother was fearless. ?If the protagonist is cautious, in contrast his brother would have been reckless.
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