1. Posted: March 12, 2020In:

    RHSC (red-headed step child)

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    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Hi Dusty, I gave this a go and added some stuff. (My interpretation from reading the original logline.) After they accidentally kill a neighbour in a fatal car crash, a newlywed couple fight to stay alive, as the man's creepy kids begin a campaign of revenge. I made the fatal accident more specific.Read more

    Hi Dusty,

    I gave this a go and added some stuff. (My interpretation from reading the original logline.)

    After they accidentally kill a neighbour in a fatal car crash, a newlywed couple fight to stay alive, as the man’s creepy kids begin a campaign of revenge.

    I made the fatal accident more specific.

    Most newlyweds are young – so I’m hoping the reader will fill that in.

    Admittedly, my logline reminds me of https://www.imdb.com/title/tt1020530/

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  2. Posted: March 23, 2017In:

    BLOODLUST The dormant past life as an 8th Century Norse Berserker is sparked in a modern day peace loving Hindu man after he witnesses his loved ones murdered in a robbery. Now he must fight to control the growing bloodlust before it destroys him.

    OlDustyDogg Logliner

    Interesting. I like the contrasts of past lifes. Im wondering if the berzerker must have atoned for his violence in order to be reincarnated as a Hindu. I also wonder How is the bloodlust destroying him. Does he want to kill random people? Is he on a quest for vengeance and taking the violence too fRead more

    Interesting. I like the contrasts of past lifes. Im wondering if the berzerker must have atoned for his violence in order to be reincarnated as a Hindu.
    I also wonder How is the bloodlust destroying him. Does he want to kill random people? Is he on a quest for vengeance and taking the violence too far? Who is judging him? Is he risking the Vikings identity taking over completely? What are the stakes? Lots of questions. I’m new to this so maybe my advice isn’t that great but my main take is that ‘bloodlust threatens to destroy him is a bit vague.

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  3. Posted: February 25, 2020In:

    When an teenager becomes insecure about her boyfriend’s friendship with their female road-trip companion, she decides to make him jealous by inviting a dangerous hitchhiker along for the ride.

    variable Uberwriter

    I think you meant-Jealous of her boyfriend's association with their female road trip companion, an insecure teenager invites a hitchhiker who turns out to be a serial killer

    I think you meant-

    Jealous of her boyfriend’s association with their female road trip companion, an insecure teenager invites a hitchhiker who turns out to be a serial killer

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