1. Posted: September 7, 2021In:

    When things starts to repeat itself and people begin to appear in unexpected places a older man tries to understand what is going on.

    NeedyGoldfish Penpusher

    This is a great start! I would like to see a clearer event, character and action though. What starts repeating itself? How is that related to the man? Who is this man, apart form being old - give him an adjective that is more descriptive of his character. What does he have to do? Understanding what'Read more

    This is a great start! I would like to see a clearer event, character and action though.

    What starts repeating itself? How is that related to the man?

    Who is this man, apart form being old – give him an adjective that is more descriptive of his character.

    What does he have to do? Understanding what’s going on seems to be the first step, but what he does with that information is the exciting part. Let that be the action of the logline.

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  2. Posted: September 4, 2021In:

    “After the murder of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggling with addiction is forced to abandon the comforts of his old life to seek revenge.”

    anna_gotland Penpusher

    I find this logline intriguing. I am curious about what "abandon the comforts of his old life" entails.

    I find this logline intriguing. I am curious about what “abandon the comforts of his old life” entails.

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  3. Posted: September 1, 2021In:

    After the death of his secret lover, a closeted small-town lawyer struggles with his drug addiction until he finds fulfillment in his long-forgotten passion: dancing

    [Deleted User]

    I like it! It makes sense to me and I picture it being a drama, maybe with some comedy. I would specify the drug(s) he's addicted to and what form of dancing your MC does. I prefer Logline #2 because "leaves his old life" paints a clearer picture than saying: "until he finds fulfillment". I would adRead more

    I like it! It makes sense to me and I picture it being a drama, maybe with some comedy. I would specify the drug(s) he’s addicted to and what form of dancing your MC does. I prefer Logline #2 because “leaves his old life” paints a clearer picture than saying: “until he finds fulfillment”. I would add what the main obstacle is for your MC, what has the potential to negatively affect his life? Is your MC still an addict after finding his true calling?

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