1. Posted: March 13, 2017In:

    After being framed for assault, an indigenous basketballer from the Australian outback, must prove himself innocent before his scholarship to play for a college in the USA expires.

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    >>>It?s funny you say aboriginal Australian because that?s exactly what he is. I just didn?t find it necessary to add into the logline as it stood. I think it is essential, part of the story hook. And it certainly matters when it comes to casting.

    >>>It?s funny you say aboriginal Australian because that?s exactly what he is. I just didn?t find it necessary to add into the logline as it stood.

    I think it is essential, part of the story hook.

    And it certainly matters when it comes to casting.

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  2. Posted: March 12, 2017In:

    A time-traveling Jewish scientist goes back to 1891 to smother Hitler in his crib, only to return to the future to find out a different Fuhrer was able to win the war, making Europe a permanently enslaved continent and the U.S. its fascist ally. Now he has to return to the past, and kill himself before he can kill Hitler.

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    >>>After his plan to kill HitlerHe doesn't plan to kill Hitler. ? He DOES kill him. ?The dramatic question is: can he undo the assassination when it has unintended consequences; ?the "cure" turns out to be worse than the original "disease"?>>>his original returns to the future, butRead more

    >>>After his plan to kill Hitler

    He doesn’t plan to kill Hitler. ? He DOES kill him. ?The dramatic question is: can he undo the assassination when it has unintended consequences; ?the “cure” turns out to be worse than the original “disease”?

    >>>his original returns to the future, but the 1891 version of himself is arrested for being a Jewish killer of Aryan babies.

    Say what? ?There are 2 versions of himself? ?Why? ?How does that happen? ?(And, yes, I’m quite familiar with “Looper”.)

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  3. Posted: March 13, 2017In:

    When his vibrant friend turns seriously ill during a road trip, and anxious recluse must get her home through a strange and threatening world.

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    Agree with Nir Shelter. ?Most "road trip" movies are framed by a definite destination -- and ?a ticking clock and/or sense of urgency. Like in "Thelma & Louise" where they ?have an initial destination (a mountain cabin) and ticking clock (for the weekend) -- and then a final destination -- and aRead more

    Agree with Nir Shelter. ?Most “road trip” movies are framed by a definite destination — and ?a ticking clock and/or sense of urgency. Like in “Thelma & Louise” where they ?have an initial destination (a mountain cabin) and ticking clock (for the weekend) — and then a final destination — and a desperately urge one — after the inciting incident.

    And what does “anxious recluse” ?mean, anyway? ? Does that translate into his suffering from something like agoraphobia? ?I realize you’re trying to create an “Odd Couple” relationship. ?That’s okay, but it’s not credible that his character arc entails “curing” his ?psychological disorder thanks to her cajoling him into taking the journey. ? That doesn’t happen in real life,; and the days when you could get away with that ?in reel life are long gone.

    ( BTW: that she brow beats him into taking the trip is a symptom of her own character flaw. ? That is, she is insensitive to his ?temperament such that she discounts how the trip will be pure hell for him. ?And she’s may also be making the foolish mistake of using him as her Pygmalion project to the degree she nags, manipulates him into acting ?like her — “vibrant”, outgoing, risk taking. Rather than accept him for what he is and appreciate his character strengths.

    I say this acknowledging that cinema celebrates vibrant, extroverted, risk takers engaged in Pygmalion projects on non-vibrant, introverted, risk aversive characters.

    Anyway, I can see a lot relationship dynamics to explore — within the framework of the right plot. ?But I don’t see the roadmap for that plot — yet.)

    fwiw

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