1. Posted: November 14, 2017In:

    When a young, successful driven singer’s life becomes subdued in the hands of her corrupted uncle and his label, she must seek a way out to regain back control, within herself and those she love.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    This is too vague a description for a logline. Check out the 'Formula' tab on the top bar for more detailed information about loglines. What specific event forces/motivates her to take action at the start of the story? What is the her flaw? She seems perfect at this point, and perfect characters areRead more

    This is too vague a description for a logline. Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar for more detailed information about loglines.

    What specific event forces/motivates her to take action at the start of the story?

    What is the her flaw? She seems perfect at this point, and perfect characters are normally boring.

    What is the character’s specific goal? What must she achieve, or fail to achieve, by the end of the story?

    What is at stake? What’s the worst that will happen should she succeed or fail?

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  2. Posted: November 13, 2017In:

    (short film) When a Yemeni family loses their father in a drone strike during war, the youngest child takes over his business to sell all water bottles in order to pay for his badly-injured mothers operation.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Can he really sell enough bottles in one day to pay for an opertation? Even if he can, there's still a lack of obstacle, what's stopping him? Where's the conflict? He sells, he earns money and then pays for the operation. Is there a competing business perhaps?

    Can he really sell enough bottles in one day to pay for an opertation? Even if he can, there’s still a lack of obstacle, what’s stopping him? Where’s the conflict? He sells, he earns money and then pays for the operation. Is there a competing business perhaps?

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  3. Posted: November 13, 2017In:

    A lonely computer programmer, looking for Mr. Right, is shut down by the government for creating an empathetic AI, so she tries something unorthodox?interacting with a human.

    Richiev Singularity

    I only mention the assassin angle because when it comes to any new invention, the government (Any Government) will ask, how can we use this as a weapon. So she creates this wonderful thinking robot to be her loving boyfriend, the government takes it and sees potential to turn it into a lethal weaponRead more

    I only mention the assassin angle because when it comes to any new invention, the government (Any Government) will ask, how can we use this as a weapon. So she creates this wonderful thinking robot to be her loving boyfriend, the government takes it and sees potential to turn it into a lethal weapon.

    But the robot is still in love with the lead character so when she infiltrates the facility to get back her robot, the robot (Who has now been trained to kill) sides with the lead character. Chaos ensues, Bad guys get their just deserts, the lead character and the robot live happily every after.

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