1. Posted: March 11, 2019In:

    After he’s fired for accidentally killing a noble hero, and thus taking away honor from his evil warlord boss, a disgraced henchman is forced to become the champion of a local village in order to overthrow the tyranny of his former master.?

    jelewis8 Logliner

    There's confusion in the premise, leading to unsure expectations for the audience. It seems like an evil warlord wouldn't care if his henchman kills a noble hero--that's why he's evil, right? Then there's the passivity of the protagonist. He's forced to do something based on something else, rather tRead more

    There’s confusion in the premise, leading to unsure expectations for the audience. It seems like an evil warlord wouldn’t care if his henchman kills a noble hero–that’s why he’s evil, right?

    Then there’s the passivity of the protagonist. He’s forced to do something based on something else, rather than his own internal decision.

     

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  2. Posted: April 19, 2019In:

    A former sex addict, unable to have sex with the woman he loves, returns to his old psychiatrist, a twisted and manipulative woman, and the only person who might be able to cure him.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Thanks for the feedback, everyone.

    Thanks for the feedback, everyone.

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  3. Posted: April 11, 2019In:

    A crazy caveman from a forest tribe accidentally ends up in 18th century London, he must find a way to get back home before he becomes an exhibit at the museum of history.

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    writecrosswords Penpusher

    I'm not good at this because I've just started, but I think first, the "crazy" caveman throws me. What defines a crazy caveman? My next thought is that this sounds like something I have seen before.? I think there needs to be something a little more original to hook me.

    I’m not good at this because I’ve just started, but I think first, the “crazy” caveman throws me. What defines a crazy caveman? My next thought is that this sounds like something I have seen before.? I think there needs to be something a little more original to hook me.

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