1. Posted: March 16, 2020In:

    Two directionless twenty-something bartenders are accidentally exposed to information about a fixed horse race and try to take advantage of this potential windfall without tipping their hand to the nasty thugs that planned the caper

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    dpg Singularity

    Jamzies:I advocate composing two loglines for works projects, a development version to rough out the fundamentals of the plot for the work in progress, and eventually a marketing version for pitching the finished script.? (Ideally, the two could be one and the same, but in practice that is not alwayRead more

    Jamzies:

    I advocate composing two loglines for works projects, a development version to rough out the fundamentals of the plot for the work in progress, and eventually a marketing version for pitching the finished script.? (Ideally, the two could be one and the same, but in practice that is not always the case. )

    “Gets in too deep” is vague,? needs clarification and specificity. Right now, I am interested in a development logline version of your concept that lays down the fundamental elements:? inciting incident, protagonist, objective goal, antagonist, stakes.? (And it is perfectly kosher for a development version to begin with “when” because it’s for a work in progress, only for private use. I agree that the marketing version for when the finished script goes public should try to avoid leading off with that word.)

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  2. Posted: September 30, 2019In: ,

    With 11 days left until the election, a political spin-doctor recruits a Hollywood producer to stage a phony war in order to distract voters from a presidential sex scandal.

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    The spin doctor is the protagonist. This is a logline for a movie that actually got made.? Getting re-elected POTUS isn't high enough stakes?? The current occupant of? the White House and his opponents think otherwise.

    The spin doctor is the protagonist.

    This is a logline for a movie that actually got made.? Getting re-elected POTUS isn’t high enough stakes?? The current occupant of? the White House and his opponents think otherwise.

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  3. Posted: February 18, 2020In:

    Johnny Bando, a Japanese Elvis impersonator, collides with Randy North, a small town sheriff tasked with modernizing his office and his band of tripper happy deputies.

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    Although I like the names and get a sense of their personalities, I'd keep them out of the logline.? When I first read "modernizing his office" I thought of an interior design makeover.

    Although I like the names and get a sense of their personalities, I’d keep them out of the logline.? When I first read “modernizing his office” I thought of an interior design makeover.

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