The premise has some good obstacles that stand in the way of love– prerequisite for the genre.? But it seems to me that “film student” is too general.? What is he?studying to be? An actor, a director, a cinematographer, or (god have mercy on his wretched soul!) a screenwriter.? I think his role in the film needs to be more specific because plot twists and relationship chemistry may be contingent on what he aspires to be.

Also, while the premise sets up a?Romeo-and-Juliet??scenario?(a love story about people separated by feuding families, class,, cash, status, language, whatever), he defined rather?non-assertively.??He pines -and what does he do about it?? It doesn’t state what his objective goal is in?terms of a game plan to overcome the obstacles and win her heart.

So, as a result of falling love with the pop star, what becomes his objective goal, his game plan,? to surmount the barriers that separate them and win her heart?