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Posted: May 25, 2016In: Comedy

A down on his luck bounty hunter becomes the star of his own reality TV show, but fame is not all it’s cracked up to be, and could even stop him from catching his long time nemesis.

Neer Shelter Singularity

Added an answer on May 25, 2016 at 3:14 pm

This sounds like a good premise for a comedy, but the plot is vague. What does "...fame is not all it?s cracked up to be?" mean? This sounds like the inciting incident, but lacks detail. What is it that happens to him specifically??Ideally this would relate to his goal of catching the nemesis.

This sounds like a good premise for a comedy, but the plot is vague.

What does “…fame is not all it?s cracked up to be?” mean? This sounds like the inciting incident, but lacks detail. What is it that happens to him specifically??Ideally this would relate to his goal of catching the nemesis.

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Posted: May 22, 2016In: Comedy

When a teenager and his best friend get his father fired they must help him find a job even though he has 2 skills (watching tv and eating)

dpg Singularity

Added an answer on May 23, 2016 at 11:29 pm

I think there is a potentially interesting story to tell here, but I'm not sure what the point is of this one -- the theme. What idea does the writer wish to explore? ?Theme is external to the content of a logline -- but it implicitly shapes it as it is an integral part of the story proper, or oughtRead more

I think there is a potentially interesting story to tell here, but I’m not sure what the point is of this one — the theme. What idea does the writer wish to explore? ?Theme is external to the content of a logline — but it implicitly shapes it as it is an integral part of the story proper, or ought to be. ?What is the point of this concept other than to use the father as a comic foil, to play him for a fool?

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