1. Posted: February 6, 2018In:

    As Mussolini?s marketing team assess the safety of a propaganda cliff jump he is about to attempt, they discover that their leader is afraid of heights.

    dpg Singularity

    >>marketing teamBetter:? propaganda bureau.>>>The marketing team are all main characters ? like reservoir dogs.Mussolini was a dictator not a syndical anarchist.? Which means there would be a pecking order, a top-down hierarchy;? somebody would be in charge of the El Douche's propaganRead more

    >>marketing team

    Better:? propaganda bureau.

    >>>The marketing team are all main characters ? like reservoir dogs.

    Mussolini was a dictator not a syndical anarchist.? Which means there would be a pecking order, a top-down hierarchy;? somebody would be in charge of the El Douche’s propaganda campaign.? Like Goebells? ran Hitler’s propaganda operation.? That’s the way things are run in a dictatorship.? The propaganda bureau can operate like a comedy writers’ room, but somebody should be nominally in charge, reporting to El Douche.

    >>they discover that their leader is afraid of heights.

    And then what?? What becomes the objective goal?

    And is there a conspiracy on the part of some one in the bureau to manipulate El Douche’s narcissistic ego to get him to kill himself — an assassination plot?

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  2. Posted: February 6, 2018In:

    After his egg family joins the “high class vegetarians”–due to his proposed thesis–Scrambled Jr. must resolve the growing vengeance of non-vegetables towards the privileges of being a vegetable

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    You shouldn't use a thesis as your inciting incident. What specific even sets your lead character into motion? What must your lead character do? What is standing in his way? Why would an egg become a high-class vegetarian?

    You shouldn’t use a thesis as your inciting incident.

    What specific even sets your lead character into motion?
    What must your lead character do?
    What is standing in his way?

    Why would an egg become a high-class vegetarian?

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  3. Posted: January 29, 2018In:

    A ruined indie scriptwriter decides to crash in a plane against the Hollywood sign. At the last moment he repents and jumps out of the plane. He falls into the pool of a mansion and inside discovers a famous writer of commercial success dead, he immediately decides to take advantage of his name

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    >>>>?I have to know more about the business in Hollywood before trying to write something like this, Write it after you sell your script about the kid who forms the club to get revenge? on the bullies.? Then you'll be on the inside, know how the business operates. >>The agent couldRead more

    >>>>?I have to know more about the business in Hollywood before trying to write something like this,

    Write it after you sell your script about the kid who forms the club to get revenge? on the bullies.? Then you’ll be on the inside, know how the business operates.

    >>The agent could be the one who has the idea of impersonating his dead client.

    Because the deceased recluse writer was the agent’s meal ticket, the only money making client he had.? The agent is a failure, too.? Which makes him desperate enough to go along with the ruse.

    fwiw

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