McCreedy

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• on After a werewolf saughters the family of a pregnant newlywed and she loses her child, she becomes a cold-hearted hunter and uncovers it’s her best friend.

  Thanks everybody!? Good stuff!

• on A law-abiding citizen finds himself in a notorious gangland bar awaiting the arrival of his future self: a killer on the run who needs his help to stay alive.

  Very interesting concept, but seems a little confusing. I had to read it several times to get the gist of the story. If I understand it, he as the killer is seeking the help of his young self to stay…

• on A desperate CEO’s legally ambiguous plans to save his company are undermined when he is blackmailed by a mysterious ex-employee.

  Overall, it relates the story.? However, and this is just me, I would drop the word "legally."? To me, this would add a sense that your main character walks a line trying to save the company, which gives support to…

• on Werewolf hunters discover an Alpha wants to eliminate them, and the veil?s pierced when their oblivious biochemist daughter realizes it?s her it wants.

  Awesome people, thank you! I think I have it, I like it. "A biochemist, unaware she belongs to a family of Werewolf hunters, discovers an Alpha is out to eliminate them, and add her to its pack."

• on A family of werewolf hunters are manipulated and systematically brought to the brink of extinction by those they hunt.

  The juices are flowing guys, keep them coming, this is awesome! How do you feel regarding this update? "Werewolf hunters are stalked by an Alpha, they discover it wants to eliminate them and add their daughter to it?s pack."

• on After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

  All your comments have been super helpful, Please continue. How do you feel about this revision? "A young mid-western woman is stalked by the spirit of a murdered psychopath who seeks his revenge by shucking his prey alive."

• on After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

  @wereviking @Karel Segars Thank you both for your feedback. The word Husk, as is, is both a noun and a verb, which IMO, does make it somewhat difficult to use as a descriptive. I keep wanting to say 'Husks", just…

• on After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

  This isn't Ed Gein.

• on A family of werewolf hunters are manipulated and systematically brought to the brink of extinction by those they hunt.

  All very helpful, thank you. Ok manipulate is out. How about this, Werewolf hunters are stalked by an Alpha, they discover it wants to end their line, and add the last remaining member, their daughter, to it?s pack.

• on After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

  Ok, I suppose this is more concise, in plainer words? After a twisted psychopath is murdered, his entity targets the present-day kin of those responsible in order to kill them and husk their skin for revenge. The entity is the…

• on Accidentally trapped in a painting by the use of future technology, four disparate teens must band together to decode mysteries and outwit thieves to find the path home.

  Very cool idea!

• on A family of werewolf hunters are manipulated and systematically brought to the brink of extinction by those they hunt.

  Your assumption is current, it's a "revengee" story. ;o) Thanks for taking the time.

• on A family of werewolf hunters are manipulated and systematically brought to the brink of extinction by those they hunt.

  Thanks for the feed back.