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• on In the aftermath of a nuclear war, a young man must defend his town from an alien invasion before they can destroy everything that remains of his life.

  I agree. Now for the adjective: The young man is resistant to using his father's gun to defend his family. He's a pacifist, but "a pacifist young man" seems flat. He does have to be forced into fighting, maybe "peace-loving?"…

• on After an American ambassador discovers he fathered a child in Mexico twelve years ago, he and his son’s gay adoptive parents must rescue him from the clutches of a ruthless drug lord who also claims to be the boy’s father before the child succumbs to a life-threatening disease.

  Yes. I think the title needs reworking. The original concept centered on the Jewish ambassador's marriage to a gentile woman, which is just a bit of exposition in the final story. I like your suggestion of "Mission Improbable." I'll be…

• on A real estate agent trying to reconnect with his estranged sister, learns that she is the leader of an underground society of clowns caught in a civil war of ideals. Now he must choose whether to get her out of the life, or suit up in pancake makeup of his own.

  This could be intriguing. But before I would review the logline or offer suggestions, I have one question: Why is he a real estate agent? How will that add to his story?

• on A bizarre explosion forces a slick counterterrorism agent to confront his beliefs about the universe in order to stop a cult from unleashing ancient gods on the modern world.

  While I could see this film piquing my interest, two things stand out to me in the logline: the use of the word "bizarre," and "confront his beliefs about the universe." What is bizarre about the explosion? Would that take…

• on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

  "Is it about a fight to the death type thriller, or is it an exploration of people going to extremes and losing sight of reality?" My answer: yes. You hit the nail on the head. There are some existential points,…

• on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

  It's happening. These reviews (all of them helpful) will keep me honest in my approach to the climax. Thanks so much!

• on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

  I like it. I'm playing with it and will add it to my list of loglines I am considering. Thanks so much!

• on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

  Thank you. The third act is being a pain. I see it in several ways. Now, I'm back to outlining the third act. One of my main concerns is the level of brutality the priest engages in as he drives…

• on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

  This review has really helped me as I write the third act. Possibly, it's caused some writer's block too, but I always work it out. It has helped me to determine, re-determine, my protagonist's role. I usually write dozens of…