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After his middle school friends abandon him during the first week of high school, a childish, imaginative teen attempts to win them back with over-the-top fantasy scenarios, but when his best friend and love interest give him an ultimatum, he must either abandon his playfulness or be a loner forever.

February 19, 2022
At the end of the world, a depressed lone survivor is found by a nihilistic gang moments before his planned suicide and decides to join their cause in “wrapping up” the rest of the human race, but when he captures a teenager who is a member of the last known colony, he must choose between commanding the end of humanity or sparing lives before his gang makes the decision for him.

February 18, 2022

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Good concept and your logline hits the necessary beats, but imo the sentence is just a little bit hard to read. I would consider rewording and/or cleaning up everything after "unless she finds the strength" I also think wording like…
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Excellent! A nitpick/suggestion, I'd consider using "lifeless" over "dull-life" which sounds a little awkward imo